Saturday, October 22, 2011

Burn Girl


Burn Girl
for L

Born from the flames:
My new identity. You can address me as
one of the same. Do not
grill me, I will not answer. Turned
over, I’m done. See how plump,
how juicy? You can eat me.
Take me in, if you can. Ingest me,
if you can. You’ll find the heat
of the spotlight turned back on you,
you in your comfort, you in your complacence,
you with your taste for crash ‘n burn movies.
No, I don’t hate you, I just can’t live with you,
there in the shadows,
the shadow world, where they say is real life.
I exist in the light.
With the angels, whose tongues of fire
sing at a pitch too high
for ears of clay.
I miss your coolness, and the nearness
of the earth, the way fingers trace
and moist breath leaves its wake
on the back window of a speeding car,
propelling higher and higher,
shedding clothes for wings.

Back among you, fallen to earth,
I can only whisper, there is a reason for this.
Or an emissary of light, an incandescent flicker
to punctuate the shadows. You
may see me—a flash here
or there, out of the corner of your eye.
You think you know me from somewhere,
like a long lost memory
when all was light, and whole,
undifferentiated Love. I remind you
of the eyes of a newborn baby
that don’t see anything because
they are everything.






This is my poetic imagining of a young mother who nearly died trying to save her baby from a burning house. I do not presume to know how such a person thinks or feels. The poem is my attempt to apply my imagination to her being. The sketches are my own.

37 comments:

  1. this made my stomach hurt mark..honestly first i thought it's about abuse before i read your footnote..we can burn in many ways i guess. an excellent and powerful write and thanks so much for the awesome prompt you put together for us...really looking forward to what the people are coming up with..

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  2. dang dude...you def did not pick an easy one..cant imagine my kid being trapped in a burning house...you wove the flame imagery through out nicely...gave me shivers...

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  3. This is a phoenix song where the singer rises out of life into death, emerging through the burning veil or portal, reborn (with her child?) on that other side. Something of Rilke's Eurydice here, where the touch of the living lover Orpheus is too painful, where death is so new on her that there's a constant flow of alternating sensations, death-in-life and life-in-death. The woman in the lower sketch has that curious glint in her eyes -- as if looking back on the transforming fire. Or is she still looking for her child? A very naked write for a fine challenge. You're quite an artist, too. - Brendan

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  4. Mark- You've set the bar higher than the sky with this one... the beautiful poems and sketches. That's such a horrible thing for anyone to go through.

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  5. No, I don't know what it feels like to be reborn after being consumed by fire. But if any words can possibly come close, I imagine yours will.

    Both words and sketches are haunting, naked and unsentimental.

    You did understand me in the previous post, Mark.
    What I'm saying is that I just never come across any American writers who concern themselves with the subjects Weizenbach chose in his novel. (acc. to you)

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  6. Oh, God, this is good. so good. A terrifying Plathian overtone to it; yes, you've set the bar in the ether and beyond...

    I love these lines:

    Back among you, fallen to earth,
    I can only whisper, there is a reason for this.
    Or an emissary of light, an incandescent flicker
    to punctuate the shadows.

    xxxj

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  7. Powerful. The words "There is reason for this" gnaw at me. Is there? I wonder sometimes about such tragedy...but people need to try to justify and make sense. Your sketches are wonderful, Mark.

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  8. Excellent work - it reminded me of St. Laurence who when asked to bring the Romans the riches of the church he returned with his congregation. They burned him. Sounds like your speaker knew what angels sing of, and where her true priorities lay, with love.

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  9. Fantastic write! Fantastic Art! What a subject to choose...wow! I just got in trouble on twitter for a depressing write...whoops! Perhaps I should send them here ;) Truly touched by this...you tackled a huge subject and did so magnificently...

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  10. I was going a whole other place with this as I read it--other fires, and other deaths and births, but your explanation made it all gel into something a bit more tangible and universal, both. The scorn in the beginning verses is so unexpected from someone whose rescue was a success, yet I can also see it as that of someone exploited for a grace beyond the comprehension of a crash-n-burn movie reality. A harsh, but I think, a true mirror, which in the ending reflects a more real and healing light. More simply--I got much from this poem, though you may have put something else there--thanks.

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  11. I, too, saw it differently until I re-read, and wow, Mark. Enjoyed the art and of course, this line stood out to me,

    "With the angels, whose tongues of fire
    sing at a pitch too high
    for ears of clay."

    You have a unique voice, which I'm always drawn to. Well done.

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  12. I really like those last two lines.

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  13. Oh, wow. So haunting. Beautiful work, both the poem and the art.

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  14. Beautiful drawings, powerful poem.

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  15. very, very good. the sketches are also very good.
    this is a distressful read...I feel so uncomfortable with her. She IS different, indeed. good job.

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  16. from a poetic point of view, the best parts are the words you use that are burn related...really powerful writing.

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  17. Powerful, unflinching work.

    "I remind you
    of the eyes of a newborn baby
    that don’t see anything because
    they are everything."

    The shift from "see" to "are," such a powerful, haunting close to a power house of a poem.

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  18. I knew a woman who lost a son in a houseboat fire. She had a wildness about her and her eyes looked as though they'd seen everything.

    This poem is challenging - accessible with image after image reinforcing the drama, the terror of losing a child, and losing it to fire. Losing yourself, and having to be brought back to life again. Such pain! Really excellent work. Gay

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  19. This gave me the chills and fright...I can't imagine such a reality but you gave it a strong voice.

    These lines speak to me:

    " I can only whisper, there is a reason for this.
    Or an emissary of light, an incandescent flicker
    to punctuate the shadows."

    Thanks for being such a gracious and encouraging host ~

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  20. This was brutally brilliant. You deftly peeled away the charred layers and got to the still beating, succulent heart of the victim.
    And their acceptance of the reality of now.

    "there is a reason for this" - perfect.

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  21. Powerful, powerful poem. It has a Plath feel to it, apocalyptic. I want to digest, need to hold on paper and read aloud.

    The first sketch haunts. Terrible beauty in the entire presentation. Peace...

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  22. Scary. I read again after reading your note and felt slightly better. Your sketches are grasping, especially the eyes.

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  23. Wow. Really enjoyed the character sketch. Unless someone is actually experienced this type of traumatic event, how could they possibly know the inner workings at play. As writers we deal with this particular exercise consistently and those that succeed are those that construct the characterization in a way that casts the impression that they have been there and this character is a part of what they or someone close to them has been through. It's incredibly hard to judge in and of itself, but it's a great job, an excellent write and read, and you did it in that way, where I feel you've actually experienced this event, or someone close to you has and detailed all they have internally to you. Awesome work, thanks

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  24. Such remarkable words and images. So pleased to have discovered your work. Will become a regular visitor I'm sure. Thanks for sharing, James.

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  25. I miss your coolness, and the nearness
    of the earth, the way fingers trace
    and moist breath leaves its wake
    on the back window of a speeding car,
    propelling higher and higher,
    shedding clothes for wings.

    this made me think of a horrific kidnapping story... my heart was gripped in fear... and then great relief to read your post note. The lines of your sketch are beautiful.... talented man you are. =)

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  26. Mark, another example of your talent. You give us a peek into what it may be like to endure such a tragedy. I felt as though I was in and out of different dimensions as I read this. Very effective and the sketch captures so much emotion.

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  27. An amazing write, Mark...that second stanza is simply amazing in depth, these two lines, esp.
    "You think you know me from somewhere,
    like a long lost memory"
    very much resonated.
    Your ability to imagine, connect is quite impressive. A loss, such as this, would be unbearable...you wonder if the burns would be enough, in her eyes?

    (sidebar, after reading this, I am inspired to continue this practice and stretch the boundaries...thank you)

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  28. very well done, I have personally heard parents describe how all their children died in their burning home, they could not get to them, very sad

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  29. Wow, amazing write. Heart-rending and harrowing. Thanks for sharing how a persona piece is really done.

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  30. this is heavy, moving -- an engaging sobering piece Mark...

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  31. "With the angels, whose tongues of fire
    sing at a pitch too high
    for ears of clay."
    and...
    "shedding clothes for wings."

    This poem took me on such an emotional journey.
    By the time I'd finished it I felt the tears welling.
    I could blame post partum hormones but I think it's probably your vivid writing :)

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  32. I've missed so many posts of friends, but I'm glad to come here, even if late. Your sketches are beautiful, alive. The poem is an ache, and a shock, and opens windows. In its entirety, and especially the ending, supports my belief (not that you think this) that newborn babies are the closest to source of a whole lifetime. Then we unteach in our civilized endeavors, what they know.

    Though I don't want it, in some way maybe we should all encounter a cosmic two-by-four like this, a fire, an illness, something that births us anew, clarifies everything, if only for a few moments. I feel that in your full and rich poem.

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  33. Thank you for joining Poets United. I have added your blog to our blogroll so others can discover you and your wonderful poetry. Poets United is what you make of it so explore, comment often and it will lead to folks doing so in return. We look forward to visiting your blog and reading your poetry.

    Ink runs from the corners of my mouth
    There is no happiness like mine.
    I have been eating poetry.
    ~Mark Strand

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  34. I agree with Linda. It sounded like something Plath would write. Or maybe read. Wow.

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  35. I can't believe I know an artist like you. What an honor. You're truth.

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